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By brook_rivers
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09 June 2006 |
I am free
No shackles to bind me
Or ropes tying me down
I am free
To do what I wish
There is now no one to consult with
I am free
To wander the world
And to discover myself
I am free
So why can’t I accept
This new found liberty?
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Simply Stunning work
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 9th June 2006 | Hi Brook
This is beautiful and incredibly evocative.
it reminds of a person who has just broken up with her other half (somehow the inference is very feminine), and is trying to convince herself that she doesn't need him anymore. But the truth is she does...
It's really beautiful
well done
best wishes
mishmish | GREAT!
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 9th June 2006 | THAT MINIMAL STRUCTURE DOES IT FOR ME EVERY TIME.
The concept of freedom is such a complex one. Even if you only consider it within the context of interpersonal relationships. The last two lines show this complexity. 'i am free-but why can't i accept it'
Lots and lots to think about. great writing.
Thanks
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Written by laya08 (10 comments posted) 9th June 2006 | | Your free , yet you dont know why. The whole purpose was to know your free but then again you get lost and you cant take it ... Nice poem . really. | Road to Freedom
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 9th June 2006 | Jean Paul Satre spent his whole life trying to figure out the mystery of the last 3 lines What does freedom mean? I like the feminine aspect you have given the question. There's more there than meets the eye as with all good poems.
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Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 9th June 2006 | Thank you very much for your comments!
Glad you liked the simple structure for a complex idea!
Bset wishes
Brook | nice
Written by writerpoet (7 comments posted) 10th June 2006 | | good poem lots of feeling,maybe it could have been longer, cheers |
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 14th June 2006 | Brook,
I like your style, and this poem especially appeals to me as I would like extremely to feel myself free.
I have not succeeded by now, anyway. 
Your poem is short and full of sense, and this is complex indeed to link this two points. It requires mastery. Really well done!
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