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To a Floral Elf

By BrianRobertNeal

12 June 2006

This is a lyric that fits the tune entitled "To a Rose"

Tripping here, flitting there, whilst I can but hover.
Floating free, so gracefully, as she ebbs and flows.
Tripping here, flitting there, lovely as no other.
You can tell, I’m in her spell, as she surely knows.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 12th June 2006

I vowed I'd steer clear of poetry but I thought I'd be safe with one of yours. You do this sort of thing very well. It fits the tune with good words and a neatly expressed sentiment. Have you ever written any songs of your own or teamed up with a musician?
cheers
BBS

Simplicity itself
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 12th June 2006

you make this sort of thing look easy

Loved the last line in particular

Thank you

Hi BBS
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 13th June 2006

Thanks for your time and comments. I'd posted the wrong version, line three was a beat short and line 4 was a beat heavy. So added "So and removed "as".

"Have you ever written any songs of your own or teamed up with a musician?"-No.

I intend to expand this to a verse/bridge/verse/bridge/verse poem. But can't get the verses right.

I'm still out of proper computer contact,

Brian.

Hi Leo
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 13th June 2006

Thanks for your time and comment.

The last line was a beat heavy so I've cut the first "as" and it not only parses 12 beats but reads beter as well,

Brian

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