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Girls Night Out
By brook_rivers
12 June 2006
Not very serious poetry here just a few ramblings!

 

Short skirt
Low top
Straight hair
Perfect make up
 

With friends
A bottle of wine
Laugh and a joke
Feeling fine
 

On our way
Reach the club
Looking for someone
To fall in love
 

Smoky atmosphere
Music blaring
Dancing dirty
Spirits flowing
 

Feet kill
I feel sick
Oh my God
Why do I do this?!

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 12th June 2006
So nothing has changed in 20years by the sound of it, probably only the music. And that last line. I wonder how many times that has been uttered? 
You really should do more funny stuff. I miss it
Sparking memories...
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 12th June 2006
Brook this is great.  
 
I agree with BBS, you should do more funny stuff. You have a real talent for it. 
 
Well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
Men are from mars
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 13th June 2006
The one thing i can say about men is that most of them don't wear six inch heels; so we don't get that foot torture thing! hoorah for sensible footwear!! 
 
great writing as ever 
 
more! more! 
 
leo
thanks guys!!!
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 13th June 2006
inspired by the obvious i thought i may as well post this up as a little diversion thanks for all your comments, & mrs B i think i just about utter that last sentence every weekend! so who knows how many times its been said!!! 
 
brook x
Memories
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 13th June 2006
Ah yes, this takes me back. Smoky pubs, tarts in mini skirts, knockers hanging out of a skimpy blouse. Fag in one hand, half a lager and a bag of pork scratchings in the other. Make-up on with a trowel, had the sister round to do their hair. More gold round their neck than Mr. T, elastic of the knickers sticking up above the top of the skirt. An hour on the sunbed in the afternoon before getting dolled up. Stick a couple of elastoplast on their heels where the stilletoes rub. A few boogies around their handbags, then pair off with some bloke for a nice little knee trembler round the back of the pub. All this in the middle of a Yorkshire winter. Well done Brook, as usual. 
 
The good old days. Or does is still go on. 
 
Givitsum

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 17th June 2006
Great description there Givitsum, i think you could make your own poem out of that!  
 
Brook

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