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By gutterkitty
16 June 2006
Why do you write sad poems
more than happy ones?
Why does your writing frown and hate
why doesn't it laugh, like you do.
You could write on jeans
and make words out of
alphabet cereal, more often.
Instead of running to scrawl tears across
scraps of paper, in the night
- aren't you delicate in the day-time too?
Why are your squares of paper
windows onto grey views,
when you're night and stars on the telephone
bare feet and toes, dancing
- your words don't dance.
Are you still behind your bedroom door?

No,
she says.
She kisses my back.
I'm not unhappy.
When I write, it's pieces of me
I take out the bad parts,
and fold them into poems
She places her palms against mine.
They don't touch me then,
see?

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loved it
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 16th June 2006
You captured something very true in the second verse. 
 
you left me pondering lots of things 
 
Thank you
Fantastic
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 16th June 2006
Oh Gutterkitty 
 
You have captured something so true here. It does seem that we always write the things that are painful, that hurt us, and we fail to speak of the good. 
 
But why do we do it...? 
 
You've encapsulated the reason in the last verse, 'i take out the bad parts....they don't touch me then, see'. If you have a problem, put it in a poem and you feel free of the pain. 
 
You have a real power in poetry... 
 
well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish 

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 18th June 2006
thank you Leo and mishmish :)  
I was asking myself why I so rarely write "happy" poetry the other day, and that's where this poem came from. I wondered if it was because painful feelings are ones we want to take out of ourselves by writing them down, whereas we are content to let feelings of happiness remain. I hope that makes sense...

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