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Poetry
Freedom
By laya08
18 June 2006
Slashed down,
Beaten,
Abused,
You want your life back
You don’t want to feel used

Bleeding from every part
Aching from back to front
You feel as if you cant go on
But it is freedom you want

Taking the pain
Taking in what you didn’t even do
Being punished for mistakes
Not just that one,  not even just two

The marks you see
The moments you remember
The days you cried
The freedom you seek forever


So yes
Only in a matter of time
You will get what you are promised
But until that day
You still remain punished

 

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more powerful writing
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 18th June 2006
I really like your subject matter, and the way you express yourself. 
 
thank you

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 19th June 2006
Understood this completely as i have recently posted a poem on freedom too.  
 
Liked your use of free verse and jagged style it worked well 
 
Best wishes 
 
Brook
Fantastic
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 22nd June 2006
Hi Laya 
 
You certainly have a skill with slicing words together and making heavenly verse.  
 
Fantastic poetry! 
 
well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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