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By gutterkitty
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18 June 2006 |
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Little man, little man You softness stains my fingers White, but unlike that Of baby's bed or nodding flower. The colour of teeth, clenched, smiling Smile for me, the backdoor is open To let in silence, loud enough To put a cold hand across Loud thoughts' incessant mouths. Your smallness is endearing, I'm sure you will not hurt me- So small, so small, Stand in the threshold Of my back door And bring the silence with you. |
Mothers little helper? Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 19th June 2006 | very thought provoking piece. gave me a lot to think about. great stuff. | Support mechanism Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 19th June 2006 | Hi Gutterkitty A strange but moving poem that immediately made me think of a 'crutch' to get through the day. Perhaps the imagery you were intending? The fact that one pill could solve all the problems, take away the noise and chatter and bring the silence, the peace, is an interesting aspect to capture in a poem. An you have done this beautifully. well done mishmish | Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 21st June 2006 | thank you both for your comments mishmish, you have a talent for interpreting poetry- well done. The pill in the poem represents anything we might use to bring ourselves peace, often with harm to ourselves. | Hi Gutterkitty Written by Marie (2 comments posted) 13th August 2006 | Hi, I loved your poem. There's a lot of passion, a feeling of great sadness and a want for hope of peace and serenity. I thought that the words written in your poem Your smallness is endearing, I'm sure you will not hurt me So small, so small MY interpertation is someone looking for a way out of reality and yet caution of the harm this may cause, because at the same time there's an intense love for living and life. cheers Marie
| Interesting Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 4th December 2006 | I find myself looking at your work again kitty, so don't misunderstand me when I say this piece is painful. The voice seems to be trying to convince itself of something...the simplicity is strange and the whole thing reeks of...something. I think it'd be good to break it up, as a whole chunk it looks like a speech or something and I'm not sure that's what you intended... I really like it, but I'm gonna take some time out to read it again and get into it, probably drop you a PM well done clo x |
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