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Poetry
Miscarriage
By ailbhe
26 April 2005
 

 
Miscarriage
You were the absence of blood
where blood should have been:
one blue hyphen, my failure of words.
.
Yours the language of a rhyming couplet
the poet could not prose,
yours the mistake that made bread
or burnt toast.
.
All I had to offer was
childhood in a moving car
with the sound of argument,
nose pressed against stricken hedgerows,
.
a hunched shoulder of grass
the verge of a world
where all grows unwieldy with weight,
and my long silent recitation of what ifs...
.
Where blood should not have been,
you were blood shed:
you did not live.

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Written by Max (7 comments posted) 26th April 2005
Hi ailbhe, 
 
I like the way that this poem travels from what should not have been in the first stanza, to what should have been in the last; that's very effective. 
 
There are also some lovely images in here, I like the fact that they are all of nature, of things that grow. And that feeling of what we don't have control over. 
 
Max

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