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Poetry
The Future
By Buchan
19 June 2006
Is life changing so fast ,we cannot see the present.  Have old values become redundant and new ones given as a new truth.   Just thoughts.

                Thoughts like pink marshmallows 
                 On  a white cloud drifting on blue skies
                 Swallows catch insects,to survive the day
                 More swallows,more insects,more ideas,


                 To exist in hope,for the future of our children
                  Do stars still shine,is one and one two,what is truth?
                  Opinion is not a fact,has money taken over as King
                  Is knowlege lost in the unreality of living life

                  Polititians who cannot lead,Governments that cannot govern
                  Thoughts of the masses gone like yesterday's fried chicken
                  World a  poor kitchen,while profits and commerce feed
                   What will be the future? A life of false advertising.



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Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 19th June 2006
I especially liked the first two lines. The last stanza is very interesting and the last line I'm afraid could be all too true. A lot to think about in this poem 
 
Brook
Lots to think about
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 19th June 2006
captures a powerful feeling.. 
 
keep 'em coming! 

Written by lordspudz (10 comments posted) 19th June 2006
Paints a very true picture. Especially liked the line "Thoughts of the masses gone like yesterday's fried chicken" 
Does what poetry should do.... make you think. :)
Pause for thought
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 19th June 2006
A very interesting poem...certainly you have a way with stringing words together to make somthing deeply meaningful and poignant. 
 
As the other reviewers have said... a lot to think about. 
 
Good writing...well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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