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Is it because....?
By brook_rivers
19 June 2006
I found this poem in an old diary from when i was about 13, and for some reason it struck a cord with me so i decided to post it. It is slightly niave and childish in some places but i think it clearly conveys the emotion my former self felt at the time!!

Why don't you laugh
And smile?
Is it because
Could it be me?

Why do you tease
All the time?
Is it because
Is the fault mine?

Why do you sulk
All day?
Is it because...
Oh please say!

Is it because you don't love
or even like me anymore?
Because if it is
I hate you right down to the core

I hate you with a burning desire
It feels like my heart has been set on fire!

Why do you push
And shun me away?
I've done nothing wrong
I want to stay.

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Is It Because
Written by Buchan (42 comments posted) 19th June 2006
Well expressed (a place in your history) worth sharing and reading..Thank You.
Enjoyed this...
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 19th June 2006
You wrote better poetry at 13 than i can even contemplate now! you can go right off people you know... 
 
Enjoyed it very much (he admits begrudgingly) 
 
Humbug 
 
Leo
Took me back...
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 19th June 2006
Hi Brook 
 
What a beautiful, poignant poem. The words, although simple, are expressed with great depth, and the turning sharp from emotional pleading to hurt and hate is quite prolific and for a 13 yr old, astounding. 
 
I think 13 is an age when we were all trying to understand and get a grasp on life. I remember writing a poem called 'What did I do wrong...' If i find it, I'll post it. 
 
I thoroughly enjoyed this, took me back...wonderful. 
 
Well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 28th June 2006
you said it all mishmash! would be interested to see a snipet of your 13 yr old selfs writing too! 
 
thanks for the comments everyone!! 
 
brook

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