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Glimpses

By brook_rivers

19 June 2006

I only see glimpses of you now
Few and far between
Like the long awaited snow in the winter time
Clustered together
Cold droplets filter through
And let me know that you are still there
The person I met all those years ago
In the smoke filled room
the only one who shone through
The crowd of fixed, false smiles
And empty gestures
The person that you once were
In the first few months
Of romantic enchantment
The person you could still be

[if you let me help you
To clear you head
Fight against the vice like grip
That the spirits have on you]

And return to the person that
You once used to be
The person that will live on and on
In my dimming memory

Reviews

powerful piece
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 19th June 2006

sounds like someone who has maybe made bad decisions and ended up on the wrong path... might just be the way i read it, but i really enjoyed it.

thanks

moving words
Written by ellyb39 (79 comments posted) 19th June 2006

This is a lovely poem, I liked the phrasing and the view of the person across the room, a recognition of something in them. Particuarly liked the last phrase, 'in my dimming memory'. elly

Glimpses
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 19th June 2006

I agree with Leo. It is awful when people change out of all recognition, and because they have got on the wrong road of life. I know all about this subject.

You have expressed yourself so very well. Well done.

Just WOW!
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 19th June 2006

Brook

This is fabulous. It sounds like someone so in love, but who has seen their partner fall into bad company or under an evil spell, and they have had to be the strong, resilient one.

I really loved the bold part, it gave the poem another dimension, almost like a second voice, or an inner voice.

the imagery of the poem is wonderful -

'I only see glimpses of you now
Few and far between'

When someone has gone in the wrong direction, that is exactly what happens, you only see glimpses of the person they used to be.

You've really captured something amazing here...really well done.

best wishes

mishmish

Written by michaelangelo (13 comments posted) 27th June 2006

really well written and expressed poem. its sad to read, quite touching!

thanks for sharing!

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 28th June 2006

thanks for the comments guys. Yes this was about someone who took the wrong path.
The italics were the hint 'spirits', i was referring to someone who lost their way through dependancy on drink

Fight against the vice like grip
That the spirits have on you

thanks again for the encouragement

brook x

Written by Phil (6846 comments posted) 26th September 2006

Just found this using that blue bar thing at the left hand side.

Not much to add. Really liked it, moving. I especially like the last two lines. At once terribly sad, but also with a hint of possible reconciliation if things change.

Moving.

All the best,

Phil.

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