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Leaving
By mishmish
19 June 2006
This poem was inspired by real events happening in my life right now.

I walk the rooms
Alone
Memories flood
Twisting pathways of yesteryear

I walk the garden
Alone
Sounds merge
Sleeping conduits to happier times

I walk the street
Alone
Sights overwhelm
Tunnelling back to brightness

My home - the place I live
And the place I will leave...

When there is nothing to believe
When everything is gone
What is left...
But moving on.

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I've been there
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 19th June 2006
A song by the Byrds-"Lady Friend", has a line which summed it up for me- 
 
"She's going to go and take her trinkets" 
 
The poem took me back to somewhere I'd have preferred to have forgotten. 
 
Brian 
 
(Typo-murge should be merge)
Leaving
Written by Buchan (42 comments posted) 19th June 2006
Great words like " Twisting Paths of Yesteryear. Sad in some respects but we must "move on" as you write. Nothing we can do about yesterday (it has gone) only today and tomorrow are yet another beginning.  
Liked your flow of words and the depth of your thought. 
Well expressed. Thank you for writing and sharing such a good poem.
powerful stuff...
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 20th June 2006
Really like this structure, its like a echo or a feeling you can't shake out of your head. 
 
And the subject matter is powerful, at the end of the day 'leaving' can be seen as a form of grief, where there is a process you have to work through, or a path down which you have to pass the reach the light at the other end.. 
 
Thank you

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 21st June 2006
I know how you feel! & somehow writing about whats going on your life does help you to come to terms with events or on a lighter note celbrate them! Agree with leo that the structure made the poem. You said so much in so few words - that is the art of poetry! 
 
Brook
Thank you!
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 22nd June 2006
Someone once said to me: 'Words can set you free!' Writing this poem certainly helped me. 
 
I am so pleased that you liked it, and I'm sorry BRN if this brought back memories, but poetry has a habit of hitting at the core of our soul when we least expect it. 
 
Thank you for all your kind comments. 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
I've been there 2
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 24th June 2006
I should have added the final line of each chorus, 
 
And I shall have to live without her, I'll survive. 
 
Thanks for your reviews. 
 
Brian

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