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Poetry
Aftermath
By patterjack
20 June 2006
Casual Moment

Come smile for me my gentle doll
suffer my casual caresses,
Keeping this watch together we will tell
of other lips and other , softer kisses.

You too have loved and then have suffered loss
and turned , to find a kind of consolation
in friendly arms that help to show a way
of burying the pain of separation.

But why should it be that one so far away
can pull the strings that move your puppet limbs?
Why is it that , instead , I always see
another's flesh that in the moonlight gleams ?

Yet smile for me , my gracious doll
these moments we will measure
by the forgetfulness they bring
and not the pleasure.

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haunting..
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 20th June 2006
Very enoyable piece. 
 
Thanks once again. 
 
leo

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 21st June 2006
Layers & layers of different interpretations make up this poem. I liked the use of the extended metaphor of a doll/puppet. I am a fan of rhetorical questions in poetry and as ever the imagery and the wording was beautifully written.  
 
Thanks for a great read 
 
brook
Aftermath
Written by Josie (2533 comments posted) 21st June 2006
Very thought provoking. It seems true that it is often through suffering that we find true friends to fall back upon. We often think that we are the only ones suffering, and I remember that once, when I scratched my wrist on a rose bush and nearly died of a streppacocca infection thinking: "Why me?" But when you speak to others, everyone suffers different things in life, and we should be there to help each other through. I also liked the use of the puppet/doll metaphor, and it is surprising how one can feel sometimes that we are all just puppets with other people pulling our strings. Extremely thought provoking.

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