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Undivine Prayer
By josefnpat
21 June 2006
Well, I wrote this at about 4 am in the morning after finishing my book, The Stand, by Stephen King.

In silence the saint stumbled
Past the remnants
Of a civil world.
A green gremlin grieves
As its smiling bumper
Is wrapped around
A telephone pole,
And child too.
The corpse of a dead whore,
Charming, cries for love,
So lost at sea.
A sea of infinite razors,
Where into the horizon,
The sun crawls towards
its red death.

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wow...
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 21st June 2006
Very very trippy, weird, dark and utterly compelling. 
 
Loads of great lines; anything about razors, whores and corpses, and you've got me! 
 
I've never read Stephen King, maybe time i did. 
 
Look forward to more darkness 
 

Written by lordspudz (10 comments posted) 21st June 2006
I've read this 5 times and each time I like it more than the last. 
Liked the line 'A sea of infinite razors'..........in fact, i liked most of the lines :grin  
 
Nice work !!!

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 22nd June 2006
I know where you're coming from on this one. I've read the Stand too, but it didn't have quite this effect on me. 
 
Really like your word play though. it's like your poem's on LSD or something. As Leo said, pretty trippy but utterly compelling. You've definitely got to read it few times to get the whole feeling, at first it feels just like words, but on the third roll through, it springs together, a portent of a dark tomorrow. 
 
Wonderful! 
 
well done...best wishes 
 
mishmish
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Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 22nd June 2006
Well I couldn't imagine this being written on a bright summers day - 4am sounds about right! Darker than a double espresso and a giant slab of Bournville... 
 
I agree with the reviews that say it gets better with each time you read it. Great work. 

Written by josefnpat (19 comments posted) 22nd June 2006
Hey guys, thanks a lot! Hehe, I guess that's what I like ab out a poem, is when is gets better as you read it! Thanks a lot for the support guys :grin

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