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Poem's Lament
By ailbhe
26 April 2005
 
A poem's lament.
April blooms
in Dublin for me, squat.
They say that once
I was a wild beat boy, that when
I strode the length of the Grand Canal,
fish kissed the soles of my feet,
skyscrapers stared me square in the eye.
That was a nice dream.
.
Truth be told,
I was always this comical spawn
of a mythical love-in, scrabbling
in shallow mud
for letters to slot together.
If my gaze was met it was not
with a giant's challenge, nor yet
that of a knowledgeable fish, but only
the eye of a discarded needle,
spinning bicycle wheel,
grinning, toothless doll's head.  

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Written by Max (7 comments posted) 26th April 2005
Hi ailbhe, 
 
There are some really nice images in A poem's lament. I was particularly struck by "fish kissed the soles of my feet,/skyscrapers stared me square in the eye." I also liked the way that you went back to these images in the second stanza, but with a more realistic eye. 
 
It made me smile, but sadly, and I feel like it's pulling me back to read it again. 
 
Max
Poem's Lament
Written by nicola (1 comments posted) 29th April 2005
Yes. I like that. :)

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