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can't think of a title
By charlotte
23 June 2006
this is the first thing i've posted and i don't normally write poetry so it's probably not very good but i wanted to write about my first really dumb relationship i had and only poetry could do that so, enjoy!


It is strange
What a look can change
It's weird all that a simple thing
Can bring
Can a human heart break,
After such a small shake?
Can a young boy really destroy,
What he sees as a mere toy?
This tells me that no matter how impacting
Young girls are normally over-reacting

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looking good
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 23rd June 2006
Nice piece of writing. 
 
look forward to lots more 
 
Thank you
Like it!
Written by Clifftown (642 comments posted) 23rd June 2006
Hi Charlotte, 
 
This is great and very clever. If anything it ended too quickly, I think it would benefit from a few more verses. 
 
Keep writing!
Good start
Written by lordspudz (10 comments posted) 23rd June 2006
This has potential and, for a first effort at writing poetry, there are signs that you'd be pretty good at it :)  
I agree with Clifftown, it did end too soon, left me wanting more.....'hint'....... ;)
Good read
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 23rd June 2006
Hi Charlotte 
 
Good poem, with lovely lines. This is a good start and I look forward to reading more. 
 
well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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