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Unannounced Felon
By Rattle_Spear
24 June 2006
Who is this masked intruder
Tapping on my bedroom window
Before the crack of dawn
The masked feathered felon
Calling out forlorn
Singing merrily as he admires his own image

Where does he come from
Why does he constantly call
Tapping in flight about to fall
He is a unique sparrow
One of a feathered kind
I could let him in if the cats don't mind

Is he cold or is he lost
What will all the answers cost
Is he here for breakfast
Does he want to play
Whatever the reason I hope he's here to stay

Reviews

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 24th June 2006
This is very cute. The rhyme is essentially sound as is the rhythm, though I think it could do with a little work. For example, the last line of the first stanza could be shortened to "Singing merrily, admiring his own image", which I think would flow better.  
Good work! :)
Constructive comments
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 24th June 2006
Thank you Guttercat. Your comments are much appreciated. I must say that the piece was written "Off the Wing!" 
Regards 
RS :grin

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 25th June 2006
enjoyed this poem. the 1st paragraph reminded me of the ghost of kathy in wuthering heights. 
 
great read 
 
brook

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 1st July 2006
Lovely poem, you captured the feeling of a bird by the window beautifully. 
 
Well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
Birdy Birdy
Written by Rattle_Spear (93 comments posted) 2nd July 2006
The bird has been visiting everyday for the last month. Maybe he has something to say. If only he would knock on the door instead of the window. :grin

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