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Love and the 7 deadly sins
By brook_rivers
25 June 2006
My lazy writers contribution for the july 1st h/w!
The style of literally 'a make your own story' was inspired by a short story written by Margaret Atwood called 'happy endings' and published in 'The secret self' ed. by Hermione Lee.
A cynical approach to the 7 deadly sins!
Hope it makes sense!

A typical love story sketch


1) Girl meets boy, boy meets girl. Girl is attracted to boy, or vica versa - but due to a mixture of emotions is too proud to confess.


2a) In some cases the unrequited lover lusts after the beloved and lust eventually turns into wrath when the love struck person realises the feelings are not mutual. the end.


2b)OR The feelings are mutual and acknowledged. In the heat of the moment there is lust - sparks fly, the heavens move ect ect. Both are undulated with happiness, for a time.


3a) Lust cools and subsides and it is apparent that the couple are not meant to be. Then there is wrath at the unfairness of the situation and undoubtedly at each other. the end.


3b) OR Lust deepens and becomes greed. One or the other, or both, wants more and more until a fully fledged relationship is formed.


4a) In some cases one lover will feels the need to dominate the other and jealousy can tear the union asunder.  the end.

4b) Or one partner can start to feel undermined or worthless, and in the shadow of their love and therefore becomes envious of their attributes and accomplishments.

4b) Or one partner can start to feel undermined or worthless, and in the shadow of their love and therefore becomes of their attributes and accomplishments.

5) Then sloth sets in. The pair are so comfortable in each other presence that more often than not they become lazy in many ways. They may forsake hobbies, family & friends in order to fulfil their hungry greed for each other. They ‘let themselves go’ in more ways than in their appearance. Sometimes the morphing of personalities can have dreadful consequences, such as the lovers speech and dress becomes imitated and as one. The sloth eventually becomes so great that the emotion of ‘love’ is entirely lost and neither one can appreciate the other.


6) Wrath of the highest order is born as a reaction to the final decay of the relationship.


a) the pair stay together in inseparable bitterness. the end.


b) The bond is snapped painfully in half and each lover ‘moves on’ to inflict the 7 deadly sins of love onto another uninformed, unsuspecting victim of humanities errors. the end.

Reviews
Perfect sense..
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 26th June 2006
I must confess i love it when ideas are structured and ordered on the page... this was great, and the varous sins were so deftly weaved into the mix... 
 
Clever stuff!
surely non-fiction??
Written by ceramix (24 comments posted) 26th June 2006
hi, i liked this because it was a very sparse approach to plot, which always sounds mechanical without the addition of characters etc. but it reads like something for an analytical essay about literature and would be quite at home in the non-fiction section, maybe with some illuminating examples (pride and prejudice for number 1)?
Hi Brook
Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 26th June 2006
I thought this was great. I enjoyed how you put alterate endings for the various story lines depending on which sin was going to be involved. Very cleverly done.
Glorious analysis...
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 26th June 2006
...of love! 
 
This was absolutely great.  
 
I loved the format...Very clever but structured and very easy to read. It had a lovely flowing style and enjoyed the alternate endings...a real 'what if' analysis played out. 
 
Well done...brook...another brilliant piece! 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
I liked it!!
Written by NuttyWithIt (38 comments posted) 27th June 2006
Brook, I did like this!! I'm not easily pleased either, so it must be good!!! lol Although I don't like the boring literary masterpieces either!! lol I like to enjoy what i read to appreciate it, and I enjoyed this immensly! xxx

Written by julie (21 comments posted) 29th June 2006
how true loved it
Circles
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 1st July 2006
Well, that was a real tour-de-force. 
I, too loved the stucture and pacing, the clever interweaving; just like the life of a relationship. It reminded me of that classic french story "La Ronde" 
Or that line by Elliot "in it's end is it's beginning" 
For my money one of your best offerings 
to date. A literary gem 
Genuine admiration 
BBS

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 2nd July 2006
Thanks Mrs B, have not seen you for a while so nice to see you backk again! Thank you very much for your reply, I have not read 'la ronde' so will have to take a look at that!  
 
Best wishes 
Brook

Written by twriter (117 comments posted) 1st April 2007
Really found this interesting Brook. You may not remember, but what made you submit this for your contribution? 
 
VBW, 
 
TW

Written by twriter (117 comments posted) 1st April 2007
Really found this interesting Brook. You may not remember, but what made you submit this for your contribution? 
 
VBW, 
 
TW

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