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By bloodange77
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27 June 2006 |
hehehe this is a bit more sad tempo than the last one i wrote but. . . hey. . . you can't blame. The only one who hasn't forgotten me is. . . my love. He remembers that i exist. Him and him alone. Forgotten-alone-depression sinking deep into my mind-racing for the end of it-in darkness-testing my emotions-blinking back tears-reading my heart for signs of weekness-anger, sadness, aloneness all welled up inside me-fear of the inexistence of being forgotten-the evil of the darkness surounding me in my one pool of light-but one out of the darkness still calls my name and lights the path-and out of all the pain and darkness i see him-waiting to get to the end-into his arms-safety-love-tears. |
hmm
Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 27th June 2006 | | it could use some work but. . . other than that i like it. | saturated with emotion
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 27th June 2006 | You pour a lot in to your work. I'll bet your mind works overtime and you produce a lot of writing. A lot of which you've yet to post.
Keep em coming. |
Written by michaelangelo (13 comments posted) 27th June 2006 | i love this. i dissagree that it needs work. it seems straight from the heart so how else better could it be expressed or written.
i found this very inspiring, as i'v been looking for ways to express through writing without spending the time trying to configure it into a typical poem...so this works spot on for me!
merci  | Vive la diference!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 28th June 2006 | I think I know where you are at. But it does take some understanding. Even so I thought you pulled it off at least with competence. Nice to see an attempt at some thing different.
Well done. |
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