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Supermagnificomarket
By bethyshambles
29 June 2006
Title is self explanatory


black
a window opens
but its shut


cupboard looks full
but its not

that means shopping
shiny floors and shiny
heads
shiny coins and shiny boys

wheels go squeak
i go squeak
in pain in the burning
darkness

red bleach, blue bleach
pink bleach
do you care?
do i care?

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Great stuff
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 28th June 2006
how we worship at the alter of the great god tesco.. 
 
give praise all rise 
 
great piece
Interesting
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 5th July 2006
Some really good lines here: 
 
cupboard looks full 
but its not 
 
Everything is really empty, for empty lives... 
 
You've captured that sense of plastic insincerity and that economic imperviousness that haunts all the 'shiny supermarkets'. 
 
Good writing...well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

Written by bethyshambles (2 comments posted) 6th July 2006
Thank you for your comments :) making me blush x

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