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Release Me
By sandra_deee
29 June 2006
Unable to erase you from
memory
uncertainty fills my tattered
heart

confusion
a constant
what is it that you
feel
Is this some fabrication
Fooling my heart into thinking
its real

Release me
Renounce your heart
Relieve me from this factitious
display of love

I may break
but
will not remain
broken
Undaunted
I will rise above

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Written by no1butClo (339 comments posted) 29th June 2006
i like this alot, but I think [now speaking as a hypocrite] that it might benefit from the tiniest bit of punctuation, or some re-arranging. this strikes me as the kind of thing you'll come back to and change later 
 
the emotion, the sort of lost feeling after a relationship's gone wrong, is really well portrayed, I like your style! 
 
x clo x
Liked this as well
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 29th June 2006
Very delicate writing, leaves the reader with a lot to think about. 
 
Thanks
Emotional
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 15th July 2006
A few words, but saying so very much... 
 
There is obviously a story here of great emotional pain.  
 
The first few lines: 
Unable to erase you from  
memory 
uncertainty fills my tattered  
heart 
 
screams of betrayal, but still deeply confused love - tattered heart - pulled this way and that, and is literally ripped apart by constant forces of confusion acting up on it. 
 
I like the fact that the poem ended on a positive note, the reality 'I may break, but not remain broken'. Whatever the outcome, it is better to be released and allowed to live free, then be shackled to a love that drags you down and rips you apart. 
 
This poem captures these emotions exactly. 
 
Great writing... 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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