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Poetry
A Remedy
By MikeMorris
01 July 2006
A poem I wrote as part of creative writing course.


A Remedy
,

When Midnight’s chime has long since struck
But sleep won’t come because our mind
Still frets and worries, then a book,
Of all Life’s pleasures, is the kind
To carry us away from care.
And place us in some jungle wild
Or  frozen waste, or in the air
To fly like that sad magic child,
Whom once we envied when our hearts
Still felt that crocodiles might tick,
And pasteboard queens bake apple tarts
And pigs build houses made of brick.
And Ratty on the river sailed,
 And Mole spring-cleaned his little den
And magic potions never failed
To bring us down to size again.
Ah well, perhaps all dreams must change
And adults think of adult things.
But surely still our minds can range
Past cabbages to think of kings?
And all those wonders that we knew
Are waiting for us, out of sight,
Where grass is green and skies are blue
And books will help our thoughts take flight.

Reviews
lovely
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 1st July 2006
I love the idea behind this. I think the beginning is a bit weak without the rhyme scheme but as the piece goes on the ideas flow into a nice rhythm and it becomes a very enjoyable read. Thank you :)
Vivid writing
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 2nd July 2006
really enjoyed this... 
 
Loved the concept and all the comforting images. 
 
Thanks very much
A lot there
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 3rd July 2006
A genuinely great piece of writing. I've heard that poems are concentrated expression and this poem was just that. There's a lot more here than meets the eye and like all good works can be interpretated in different ways. 
It was well structured and paced poem with a lot of subtext. A pleasure to read 
cheers 
BBS

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 4th July 2006
Many Thanks to Gutterkitty, Leo and BBS for the very kind comments. You have given me the courage to try another. 
Thanks again, 
Mike
Wonderful poem.
Written by growingpains (14 comments posted) 4th July 2006
This is a beautifully structured poem,full to the brim with the imagery of our minds being absorbed and entering a different world away from all our cares "past cabbages to think of kings".The gentle rythems relaxing and sensitve,took me back to my childhood and all the stories I cut my teeth on,thankyou for bringing all those happy memories back to me.I love the ways the lines flow over,I agree with "bbs", a genuinely great piece of writing ", that I will never tire of reading. You have set the 
bar Mike and I will try really hard to limbo under it,my hero!
Child at Heart
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 15th July 2006
When we are stressed and have problems pressing down, how wonderful it would be to imagine ourself as a child, believing in magic and impossible things, and most of all escape... 
 
Well Mike, in your poem you have helped achieve this sense of childlike wonderment...a true remedy of today's crazy world. 
 
A fabulous poem with absolute gems contained therein. 
 
Really well done 
 
mishmish

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 18th July 2006
Many thanks to growing pains and mishmish. are you sure it's my poem you read? :-) 
Many thanks again, 
Mike 
wonderful!
Written by rilLie (329 comments posted) 13th August 2006
it's bloody brilliant. well done. 
 
-rilLie 
 
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