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By Passionatewriter

02 July 2006

This a short poem. Any tips on how to better lay it out will be more then welcome. I'm still a beginner when it comes to poetry so I need all the help I can get. Thankyou.

I look into the shadowy depths of your mind

I know I must have you for your soul

Is entwined with mine

We belong together you and I

For fate has bound us together

A bond that cannot be broken
No matter how hard you try

It is a bond of love and peace

A bond that will last eternity

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passion shows through.
Written by growingpains (14 comments posted) 4th July 2006

Found the spaces inbetween each line made it seem disjointed and harder to read.Found myself reading each line as a seperate statement,maybe some punctuation to help the reader.scan the poem more easily,the second and third lines are one whole complete thought but appear to be seperate ideas at first glance.Writing about love and soulmates can be a complex subject to tackle and your passion shows through.Well done.

Written by peeano1 (86 comments posted) 7th November 2006

Although there a few gaps and complications between the sentences, I have to give you credit for trying to tackle such a topic. Yes, it's complicated and at times things may sound cheesy but I have to say that this piece of work does is on the right track to being very good. A job well done!

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