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Poetry
Faith
By gutterkitty
02 July 2006
Cold against the skin
of my foot, a round silence
almost black.
That's what you are,
I take with me
in my pocket, an unused mouth.
Held still against my ear
in the hope that you
are still alive,
I can almost hear
a beat, the one my footsteps
used to follow.
Now you are so small
a stone, found by chance
washed until black-
I would I hadn't touched
your skin with water.
Now you're on my palm
resting, sleeping, I couldn't tell.
I'll keep you in my pocket
and dream of swallowing you,
whole beneath my skin
my hearbeat once more.

Reviews

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 2nd July 2006
a very interesting poem - would love to hear how you created it!  
 
brook
Intriguing
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 3rd July 2006
I must confess i didn't entirely understand what was going on but still very much enjoyed it! 
 
Just how did you create it?

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 4th July 2006
thank you for your comments brook and Leo :) I can understand that this poem would be a bit baffling if you are not me...to put a long story short it is about losing your faith and wanting it back but not knowing how to believe any more. I compared my faith to a stone which I found in my garden and washed, and which I have since kept. The washing I compare to the acquisition of knowledge, which can make it difficult to believe. When I say I dream of swallowing it, I am referring to a desire to find a way, a shortcut, back to belief. I compare the stone to a heart, in the sense that faith can keep you "alive", be a centre of living, and give you a "beat" to walk to- guiding your choices.

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 15th July 2006
After reading the poem and why you created it - I find it to be very powerful. 
 
Often in life we grab hold of something tangible and imagine it into a different intangible role. The idea of the stone is very interesting as stones have been scientifically found to pick up properties or 'feelings' from us...Most people know crystals have these abilities, but any stones do this too.  
 
I loved the idea of being able to 'create' a short cut back to belief by 'swallowing faith'. 
 
Very intriguing and well written poem. 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
Thankyou
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 17th September 2006
I can identify with this so well it's unbelieveable. 
 
I would try explain what I mean, but after reading that poem there's nothing so say.  
 
Thankyou so much, if it's okay with you I may send it to a friend, it's very relevant to them right now and I think it would help.  
 
please let me know if you'd rather I didn't 
 
cheers again :grin  
 
clo x

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