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Floating Free.
By growingpains
03 July 2006
Wrote this after getting my first computer and joining the writing forum.

Here I am in cyberspace
Floating free and full of grace
I've caught up with the human race
And dipped a toe in cyberspace.

No more talking face to face,
No more writing at snails pace.
My pen was mightier than the sword,
Dispatch my enemies now on word.

You can be he, you can be she,
Twenty two or fifty three,
Earth- mum or city-slicker,
Lonely youth or defrocked vicar.
Surfing on the world wide sea,
I don't know you, you can't see me.
I'm anonymous as I want to be.
In cyberspace my words float free.

I'm logging off, I'm logging on,
I'm software,hardware, techno-dumb.
I'm cramping up, my legs are numb,
Yet browsing, scrolling with my mouse,
I never need to leave the house,
Lost all feeling in my feet,
Oh bugger,damn, I've pressed delete...
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Reviews

Written by laya08 (10 comments posted) 4th July 2006
The last little paragraph there messed up the flow..In my opinion

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 4th July 2006
great first piece for the site! 
will look out for more of your work 
 
best wishes 
 
brook
good one
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 6th July 2006
Enjoyed this
Very good
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 8th July 2006
Loved the last line... 
 
Very fluid and really worked. You captured the whole 'cyberspace' thing...We can all be whatever we want to be! 
 
Look forward to seeing more of your writing. 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 10th July 2006
Beautifully crafted piece. To be able to combine humour with skill is a rare gift. Can't wait for more of your work! 
Don't leave it too long. 
Mike

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