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Scarred
By Trifox
07 July 2006
Another Old Poem. I wrote this after falling for a friend, after which, our relationship took a dive for several months.
It was just a quick piece to sum up how I felt.
Again, not the best piece Ive ever written, but hey.


I am broken,
I am scarred.
See me reach into my soul.
Bitter memories,
long forgotten,
No time time to think,
Cos "life goes on".
And it goes on:
You walked away,
And left me standing here...
Like a rock beside the ocean,
Devoured by the waves.

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captured
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 7th July 2006
The last two lines in particular catch a very powerful feeling. 
 
Great stuff

Written by Trifox (3 comments posted) 9th July 2006
Thank you

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 15th July 2006
Small but perfectly formed poem that sums up the feelings of pain from the broken relationship. 
 
The whole idea of 'life goes on', mustn't think of memories, makes the poem feel quick in its pace. The feeling that any thought, any action that didn't bring back the old memories was better to have/do, when in fact, the waves (the memories/emotions) still devour in the end. 
 
Very powerful stuff 
 
well done 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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