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Wall Flower
By brook_rivers
08 July 2006


''Don't look at me!
Let me shy away in the corner
The pretty
Wallflower
That blends into the crowd''

Fearful, Conscious, Aware?

Of all that is going on around her,
So desperate to be part of it,
But something holds her back,
Keeps her ensnared in silence,
All she can do is smile,
Suagary sweet.

Embarrassed, Uncertain, Anti-social?

Wishing things were different,
That she could bound,
Away from the silence,
That sticks in her throat,
And joyfully scatter,
All her inhibitions to the wind.

Carefree, Happy, Bold?

Reviews
Very Clever
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 8th July 2006
This is a poem on two levels and it is very clever indeed. 
 
You've encapsulated the typical 'wall flower' situation, described her inner feelings. But by using the three adjectives after each verse questions her actions, both conscious and subconscious. 
 
I loved this interplay of words...really good and really fitting for the poem. 
 
Well done, great writing! 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
Great!
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 8th July 2006
Serious question. Do you think poets 'see' more on a day to day basis than most other people? its just that some of the poetry i've been reading captures, or reflects upon things i would have missed... just a thought. Great stuff.
enjoyed this
Written by ellyb39 (79 comments posted) 9th July 2006
Hi Brook  
Did enjoy the last verse particuarly, there is a hope of change there in the way that you have presented the adjectives as questions. thanks elly
ooh...
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
I like this alot, but the commas at the end of lines didn't work ofr me. I'm a big fan of sentences in poems, even if they hav pauses and rhythm and such.  
 
Love the idea, reminiscent of discos and parties...thought provoking in a *funny* way :p  
 
clo x

Written by sampaguita (7 comments posted) 8th January 2008
I love this, a unique introspection with a bouncy feeling. I like the use of the three adjectives but with the use of the question mark, I'm kind of irked by it as personally I keep hearing a voice with inflection. Aside from that, I love the concept of it all. 
 
btw: "Suagary sweet", is the a in sugary supposed to be there?

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