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Poetry
It Hurts
By charlotte
08 July 2006
this poem isn't about a specific experience but its just about how it feels when someone you love has a habit, hobby or friend that is more important than them


It hurts to see you do that
It hurts cos it means so much to you
It hurts to see you do that
It means more than i do
I hate it when you ignore me that way
I hate it how you turn away
I don't agree
And i try not to argue
But it hurts too much
It means to much to you

Reviews

Written by steve_turner (21 comments posted) 8th July 2006
my sarcastic impulse wanted to warn you of the dangers of co-dependency.....but.....i really did like the simplicity and the humilty of your words. 
 
your last line has a typo. maybe you meant "so" instead of "'to." 
 
consider me a fan... :)
specific experience
Written by growingpains (14 comments posted) 8th July 2006
I have had this specific experience and understood completely the sentiments of the poem and how it can make you feel.Well put.
Great piece
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 8th July 2006
In truth i'm probably one of those guilty of giving the impression that work and hobbies come first.. so you made me think and i will do something to change the situation. 
 
Great writing, it's good to be made to stop and think.
Obsession
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 31st July 2006
We're all guilty of it at some time in our life...and your poem really portrays the pain the other half goes through as a result of that obsession... 
 
A lesson to be remembered.. 
 
Thanks you for a superb poem! 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish

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