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| The Not So Perfect Life- Chapter Three | |
| By CorletteLoveheart | ||
| 09 July 2006 | ||
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hey... i don't know if anyone read my last comment so i'll say it again... if anyone wants to help give ideas i'll be happy to use them... i want to know what you want to see from them... and this chapter is about Aofie Struggling with her grandmothe and knowing about the crisis camp. there is a little more diolouge but i think i need to work on it more. HOPE ITS GOOD AND PLEASE MORE REVIEWS! Love Corlette Aofies Grandmother walked up the stairs to Aofies room to do somthing that she knew would kill Aofie. But she had to do it. She just had to! Didn't she? Didn't she see Aofie attempt to cut? She knew Aofie would have no idea how to, but just wanted to help her with it. She didn't want anything to happen to her beloved Grand-daughter. Aofies grand mother had just made it to the top of the stairs, when the phone rang. So she climbed back down the stairs to awnser it. As she was hanging up the phone (stupid telemaketer people!)she looked on the moniter of the security camera in Aofies room, to see her cutting herself. No not for attention, simply slashes, slashes all up her arms and legs, long deep slashes with blood threatening to drip out if she wasn't careful. Aofies grand mother couldn't take it. She waited and watched though as Aofie cut herself. She would not go into that room and see the actual blood. It was worse then sweeing it on tape then. As Aofies Grandmother calmed down, and no more tears threatend to come she made her way up the stair. This time faster and more determined to reach the top. And then knoked on her door. "Aofie. Hunny. It's me." Aofies grandmother spoke through the crack in the door. "Uhh... Just a sec Grandma!" she yelled. Aofie had to hide the scissors. Because she finally thought over cutting and decided to try it. "Aofie. It's urgent hunny. We need to talk." Ugghh.... Aofie hated that word. Talk. It even sounded vile. As Aofie cringed her nose and put on her jacket and hid the scissors sher opened the door for her grandmother and she came in. "Aofie hunny. I need to tell you somthing." her grandmother was being very hesitant with this as it was a VERY sensitive topic. "Now Aofie, I know you don't like talking very much but., well... Ok. Let me start from the beggining." Aofies grandmother took a big breath. "Thats generaly where somone starts grandma." SHe spoke. "Aofie this is serious. Now You have been through a lot and even I can recognise some things going on. Just I wanted to tell you that, when you moved here i had a security camera installed before you came so that I could keep an eye on you." She blurted out. The colour in Aofies cheeks was suddenly drained. Like somone had pulled a plug. "So..... You have been watching me?" Aofie asked slowly. "yes. I also wanted you to know that cutting is not a way of dealing with things." Her grandmother said thinking it was the right thing to say. Clearly. She was wrong. Aofies cheeks suddenly went bright red and her veins in her temples popped out while her eyes went shiney with anger. "WHAT??" Aofie screamed "HAVE YOU BEEN WATCHING ME ALL TODAY?? I HATE YOU! YOU MAD OLD BAT! I HATE YOU! I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN! GET OUT OF MY ROOM!" Aofe was so upset she thought that she could die. Yes. This was the most terrible thing that ever happened to her. Yes she had lost mainly all the people she cared about but the worst was having somone who cared about her decieve her and tell her what she had been doing and experienceing herself. But Aofie truely didn't mean what she said to her grandmother. It just... Slipped out, Slipped out with all of her emotions and feelings. She was a walking time bomb. And she knew it. Her grandmother had not been affected by the explosion though. She had braced herself for somthing like this and thought. It definately is time for her to go. Aofie's grandmother spoke to her. "Please Aofie. Let me talk to you." "I don't want to talk." said Aofie folding her arms like a six year old who didn't get her way when she wanted somthing. "Fine." Her grandmother told her then. "I'll talk. You see this?" her grandmother asked her pulling out the brochure Aofie nodded her head. "This is a camp. A camp that will help you open up, tell you things that you can do without self harming like cutting and they give you a trainer that is only for you to talk to. You're own special person to confide in. And they have a trainer/Student confidentiallity code. So whatever you say will stay their." Aofie's heart was racing and she had about a million thoughts run through her head but she still looked up at her Grandmother questioning. her Grandmother sighed. "I want you to go here. It's nly for a little while!" she added as Aofie looked up. "And you will be back home before you know it! Please, just look over the brochure and get used to the fact. Because you are going!" and with that her grandmother walked out of her bedroom and closed the door behind her. yes she felt awful. But it would do Aofie some good. and Aofie needed to talk. no matter how she felt. Aofie walked ovwer to the door with the brochures in hand. she slid down the door and looked at them. I can't go here! She thought This isn't the right place for me! they will make me tell! they will make me tell all of what has happened!... I don't want to tell! I can't tell. I wish I could tell though. Aofie looked at the brochure with tears in her eyes. She looked inside it and was trying to see the good side of things. Well.... at least it's mixed. so that if i needed a guy friend instead of a sleazy girl one i will have one. Aofie felt tearas rolling down her cheeks. did her grandmother seriously want to get rid of her that much? was she causing this much damage here? was she really wanted here in the first place? or was she just dumped here? Aofie really had no idea. All she did know at this stage is that she would sleep on it and that she would never cut again...
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