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There I Was All Alone…
By James
09 July 2006
Well I'm not too good at titling things, so I just used the 1st half of the first sentence from the majority of my poems. This poem, as you will soon realise upon reading it, is about suicide. I sorta felt low for a while last year or so ago, so I wrote this peom to put an end to it once and for all. I didn't ever try to kill myself, although the thoughts did cross my mind. I'm more than fine now so theres no need to worry. I look forward to your reviews!

By the way, I'm a 16 year old and with peer preassure, GCSE exams, etc. its not a suprise I felt a bit stressed. This is my 1st poem.
 
One last note, thanks for reading!!

This poem was written on 03-07-3006 and published on 09-07-2006 at 21:37:13

There I was all alone; no one was there, no one to care,

I sat on my own; I kept thinking about it over and over, did I dare?

It seemed so simple, just to end it all,

I thought it was time for my curtain call.


Life was tough but I never thought I’d see the day,

Where I’d take my own life and make everyone pay,

It just got too much for me, I needed to go,

One final slit, one final blow…


So here I am, faced with the biggest decision of my life,

Should I stand tall or should I stop this fight,

It’s too hard for one person to overcome,

My final hour has almost come.


So as the blood flows from my wrists I stop and think,

Running frantically for the sink,

This is the end, its time to say good-bye,

My life is over, it’s the end, as a tear falls from my eye.


Reviews
Not alone
Written by Josie (2722 comments posted) 9th July 2006
It would be hard to find anyone who has not felt depressed at some time or other in their life - and depression needs treatment from a doctor. I was reading today in the Independent on Sunday that soime schools are so concerned about depression with adolescents that they are teaching "Happiness" in classes. The problem in this day and age is that too much value is put on success in examinations etc. When you feel depressed, look for someone that you know that needs your love (and you don't have to look far). In looking outward towards others, and doing good for others, you will overcome your own depression - and tell yourself that you are the best - no matter what others think. I speak from the point of view of a retired teacher who has taught young people all my life, and loved every minute of being with them (and still do). Young people are the best!
You made the right choice.
Written by growingpains (14 comments posted) 9th July 2006
moving poem and well written, you have a real telent.I have used poetry most of my life as aform of therapy,its one of the best there is for expressing what we feel when sometimes we cannot vocalise it ( I never could)You have shown real courage " to stand tall"and in the process have grown as a person, I have a 15year old daughter and understand ( as she would) just how overwhelming life can be at times, but life can also be great with lots of great people, and you will never be alone on this writers forum, you will have more friends than you can shake a stick at,and a brilliant way to share your talent,nice one James.

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