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Poetry
Dancing
By maipenrai
11 July 2006
Memories of Kosova

Vodka Brains
screaming and whirling
bloodlust eyes
the madness deep inside
no mercy,no regrets
no pity either
when dancing with the Lord of Death.

so much more to do
before the cleansing is done
to cleanse the land of the others
then we will be free,
we will drink to rejoice
we will drink to forget.

Vodka Brains
madness inside
twerling,whirling
screaming out our hate
dancing once again.

Raped and Abused
she can only sit and stare
through nightmare eyes
at the soldiers dancing

the victims of the dance
lay torn and bloody
on the village green
now turned red,
the blood of the victims
turning green to red.

the children,the old,the women
their mutilated bodies show
the pride and joy of the Lord of Death
and the dance will begin again
soon
when the soldiers come for her
the soldiers dancing once again.

Reviews

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 11th July 2006
Your work always really makes me think. I'm soft and can't handle the important stuff so, at the moment I stick to " feel good" stuff. Maybe one day I can face things like you. 
Many thanks for this, 
Mike
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 11th July 2006
Thanks Mike,I think a lot of what we write comes from our past,what we have seen,what we have done,in my case ex military and for some years now in Aid,I travel a lot,see things ,it stays with you. 
 
Thanks Again Mike 
Bernie
more powerful suff
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 11th July 2006
you give us all a very vivid insight into a world that very few of us will experience. 
 
i enjoyed this very much, although 'enjoy' is a relative concept given the subject matter 
 
thank you 
 
Leo
thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th July 2006
Thanks Lee for your comments 
 
Bernie
love it
Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 29th November 2006
the mix-up of images really plays in your favour here, andthe fast pace heightens the sense of panic, but possibly gets it a bit carried away. prehaps re-jig the layout? 
 
nice work 
 
clo x
love it
Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 29th November 2006
the mix-up of images really plays in your favour here, andthe fast pace heightens the sense of panic, but possibly gets it a bit carried away. prehaps re-jig the layout? 
 
nice work 
 
clo x

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