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Poetry
Turning
By Rachel
13 July 2006
Like many people, i guess, i have reassessed my relationship with my father in the light of his recent illness and death.  my happiest memories of him are in his garden, which he - and I- loved.

In the beginning
I was Daddy’s girl.
His garden was our kingdom,
silence our language.
I followed
as he bowed and straightened
strong over his spade.
I swooped, a bird,
on the glistening worms
he turned from earthy blackness
and carried them
in my proud plastic bucket:
Our harvest.
 

 

They said whatever he planted grew.
And so did I.
I was no longer Daddy’s girl.
Not to worms
but to words
and people, places
I turned
flew.
 

 

Now again
silence is our language
and we wait
away from birdsong
in barren white emptiness.
I dig into
my mind,
turning
the fertile blackness
until I find
glistening memories
planted then
now grown to fruit
to make me strong.
 

 

May 2006
 

Reviews
Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 14th July 2006
Hi Rachel,hope you are ok,it is not easy to lose a parent,but memories can keep them alive. 
 
as for your poem from my point I think it was a good write.
Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 14th July 2006
Hi Rachel,hope you are ok,it is not easy to lose a parent,but memories can keep them alive. 
 
as for your poem from my point I think it was a good write.
fantastic
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 26th July 2006
I love this poem- I have no idea why it seems to have received so little attention. I love the simple language, the way you speak first from your point of view as a child and then from your point of view now as an adult. The words you use produce vivid images: I particularly like the metaphor you use to describe bringing back memories of your father. Thanks for such a brillant read :)
boodiful
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 27th November 2006
You've captured the emotion without overplaying it. This poem speaks volumes 
 
well done 
 
clo

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