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Poetry
to the boy.
By prosperity
28 April 2005
i was touched by a disabled child playing happily on a beach in spain. what lessons we learn  everyday.


           A child
           wallowing in a sandy pool
           arms flaying
           touching the essence of the sea,
           his communion with being.

           He stands turns
           one eye
           no nose to catch the fragrance,
           he walks
           convulsive movements threaten control.

           A child
           his father encourages discovery,
           the rippling tide bathes his feet
           not mindful of his imperfection.

           He laughs
           as white foam drinks the sand
           the joy of the splash,
           he turns
           in convulsive movement runs
           to his sandy pool.

           The child
           becomes my teacher

           The comprehension of my
           persumed state of perfection
           rocked
           by the perfection of his imperfection

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Hi
Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 9th May 2005
 
 
great line. Lovely poem, well observed. 
 
spidey 

Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 9th May 2005
as white foam drinks the sand 

Written by CatGem (33 comments posted) 15th June 2008
lovely poem 
 
One thing stuck for me a bit.. 
He stands turns 
one eye 
 
As I read it (esp. aloud) I find myself wanting to hear it as: 
He stands 
Turns 
One eye 
 
Of course, that could just be me, as well... smiles 
 
it's lovely - thank you for sharing

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