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Poetry
Labyrinth
By gutterkitty
21 July 2006
This is one of my favourite of the poems I've written. It's hard to explain what it means; I think it is about being afraid of what the future may bring. The feelings I describe are, though somewhat bizarre, real.

Can you feel that?
These paths twisting
From my heart
Grey spirals curling
Out into the landscape.

I could fall
Fall down one of those ways
Disappearing into hills
Into the silence.

Can't you see them?
They're bursting forth
I can hear them.

           Hush, you say.
           There's nothing there.
           You're dreaming again.

Place your hand
On my heart
Can't you hear it?

They're bursting forth
Paths curling around
my wrists.

A kiss on my forehead.

            Hush,
            you say.
            You're dreaming again.

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Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 21st July 2006
Best yet
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 21st July 2006
Old fumble fingers here got too excited and thinks he might have sent a blank comment -- Sorry if that is so, 
 
This poem has many overtones that speak to me, particularly as I feel at the present moment . 
 
I think I can say that I can see why you yourself should favour it  
 
Structure , form , content all eminently suited to each other  
 
patterjack  
 

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 22nd July 2006
this gives me a feeling of understanding of what is being said without my being able to explain it logically. It speaks to the senses not the brain. Brilliant. 
Mike

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 26th July 2006
thanks patterjack and Mike :) Glad you liked it.

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