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Shattered China
By brook_rivers
22 July 2006
Like a storm in a teacup
The intense heat boils over
And dangerously combusts

Shattering the delicate china
Into sharp, uneven fragments

Broken asunder
unable to fit the pieces back
together

I tape over them
gloss over the fact that
it can never be
that same cup

Intact
and anyone who comes
near
may be drawn into the
aftermath of the still raging storm

Be careful
You might just hurt yourself
on the spiteful sharp edges

That are now the only remains
of that once exquistly moulded teacup.

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Strong Imagery
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 22nd July 2006
Hi Brook 
 
I loved this poem. I feel that the cup is an analogy for much bigger issues, like relationships.  
 
The lines 'The intense heat boils over' - the argument that breaks down the relationship. 
 
'Into sharp, uneven fragments' - the sharp words and actions that result from the breakup 
 
'Broken asunder' - too much said/done to put thing back together again properly 
 
'I tape over them' - try and mend the relationship, put on a brave face if kids are involved 
 
'aftermath of the still raging storm' - friend/relatives take sides, creating more of the storm of the breakup 
 
'on the spiteful sharp edges' - bitterness and hardness are the eventual result 
 
The last line: 'of that once exquistly moulded teacup' is perhaps the saddest of all. A perfect relationship broken to smitherens. 
 
Sorry if this review's a bit long...But I really, really liked this piece a hell of a lot, and I read it a number of times to get the full sense and meaning. 
 
It's just brilliant...really well done Brook 
 
With best wishes 
 
mishmish x

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