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Come to Me
By maipenrai
23 July 2006
Come to me
You
the one with the golden voice
come to me
comfort me with your
words of love
come to me
make me smile again
or
let me cry.

it's been so long since
I have cried
your words could awaken
my feelings of loss
come to me
let me cry again.

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Yes..But no
Written by laya08 (10 comments posted) 24th July 2006
I understood It perfectly, but it just repeated over and over and over in my head 'come to me' and it started to mess with me. But thats my opinon, nice writing. But take some of that out.
come to me
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 2nd August 2006
Thanks Laya for your comments 
Bernie
come to me
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 2nd August 2006
Thanks Laya for your comments 
Bernie
come to me
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 2nd August 2006
Thanks Laya for your comments 
Bernie
your poem
Written by Constantine (5 comments posted) 5th January 2007
Perhaps a shorter poem with some obvious lines omitted might be more striking.
=)
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 5th January 2007
Some lines might be better off not being separated, but maybe I shouldn't be saying that since I'm not good at that stuff either.  
Other thoughts: "comfort me with/words of love" would that work? because "your" somehow, in some weird way for some reason, gets in the way for me there. also, what about "come to me again/let me cry again" because, again with the weird reasons, I think it would make the end stronger. 
I like the poem though - been there...sorta. & I like the "or" on a line by itself for emphasis. =)

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