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All The Wild Horses

By brook_rivers

24 July 2006

All the wild horses
couldn't drag me back to you
especially after
all the things you put me through

A split personality
saying one thing
doing another
not informing me
just allowing me to discover

The web of betrayl
that you calliously
spun around me

the dishonesty, the lies
How did i not see through
you in the time before
when we lived for laughter?

Pride meant nothing
I begged you to come back
But i can't change you
and frankly i don't want to
anymore

i haven't got the time
or the energy
to spend on you
My money has run out

nothing in the world can change
what happened
or whats going to be
but one thing i do know is:

all the wild horses
wouldn't drag me back to you.

Reviews

Wonderfully Evocative
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 24th July 2006

Hi Brook

Obviously this work is borne out of a painful relationship. The words are so real, so raw, I winced while reading it. You've captured that element of deception in a relationship, the deceit, the lies and the aftermath that follows a break up.

This is a well crafted piece that screams out, painfully and poignantly. I really enjoyed reading this, but I know that this couldn't have been an easy one to write. Especially when you included that line: 'Pride meant nothing'. That speaks volumes and indicates an evocative backstory.

A wonderful poem...well done.

best wishes

mishmish x

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 25th July 2006

I agree with mishmish and have to say it almost made me cry, taking me back to a bad relationship of my own. I am not really qualified to say much about it, except that i loved it, and well done.

Written by anna_svit-kona (42 comments posted) 2nd August 2006

Yes, agreed with Mish. Great poem. One thing I like about it that I believe makes it stand out is your use of the line
All the wild horses
couldn't drag me back to you
I think it gives the poem a flavor and a personality.

Keep Writing!~
Anna

nice poem..
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 6th August 2006

i agree with mishmish.. it's realistic pain...

keep writing, i like it!

-rilLie

0_o

dear brook ...........
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 6th August 2006

......... it's only when I read something like this that I realise how blessed I must be to be looking at the beginning of our 26th year together (17 of them married).

A difficult subject to write about, and one which must take a great deal of courage. Well done!

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