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| Cocoon - revision | |
| By Gill21 | ||||||||
| 31 July 2006 | ||||||||
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Hi everyone, this is a revision on what i wrote before. I think it's a little better but the last stanza is still not quite right? I'll wait and see what you think. I lie limp in this semi-human state, and feel a life pass me by. I lie barely conscious, hypnotized by the pattern of passing clouds, which carry with them my hopes and my dreams; the core of my being. So far away now i can hardly see. So much pain, how can i stand it. Suddenly those yester years don't seem so bad. I sway back and forth, in this cocoon of debilitation, craving passion and adventure. Craving what lies in my heart. I patiently wait. I squeeze my eyes tight willing tears not to fall. And i remind myself not to be scared, for i know, one day i'll emerge, one day i'll be back, as a strong and beautiful butterfly.
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