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By patterjack
01 August 2006
This is only a tentative effort to provide a starting point for someone to take plot development a step further.

I am not familiar enough with the characters so far introduced in the Village , and am not willing to disturb or disrupt the canon .

Peter , as I conceive him at this point , may be summed up thus :

Physically : tallish , blond , at the moment unshaven . Strong though not overly muscular . Scar on the back of th left hand is his only obvious distinguishing mark ; there may be others hidden ! Clothes clean but worn -- practical jeans and t shirt , good boots. Some more dressy pieces in his pack .

Mentally; Intelligent , rather self contained , not very outgoing at all , but willing to respond to any friendly overtures . Slow to anger but fierce if roused .

He is now waiting .

What will be the Village reaction to him , if any ?

I can't guarantee my continuing this piece if anyone takes it up , but I could try


The tourist

-- Oh hell , said Peter Jack , as he dumped his rucksack near the drinking fountain on the village green.

-- Not a bloody native in sight .

Not that he expected that there should be . Ever since his Canadian friend had pointed to the map and noted the quiet isolation of the village , in his transAtlantic fashion he had developed a plan to * get out into the countryside * The Canadian had waxed enthusiastic at the thought of a time spent in truly rural England , and had persuaded Peter to join him in an excursion into the wilds of the shire.

Then of course , as soon as preparations were completed , a message had come demanding his friend's return to Canada. It was an urgent family request , and not to be ignored so that left Peter with the choice that he should also abandon the project or proceed on his own. Being somewhat tired of spending time in cities that looked like every other city , Peter plumped for the trip outwards from urban civilisation.

Hitching down the main drag , he had himself dropped off at what he thought should be the nearest point to the village . He realised now just how mistaken he had been .

Striking down the bye road he had chosen as the daylight steadily faded , he thought to take a short cut , over a stile , across a field. By the time he had reached the other side of the field the light had gone enough to allow him to mistake a track through a coppice as one leading in the direction he wished to go.

That was the end of any hope of finding the village for something like six hours . He must have lost the track and walked in circles until finally he gave up , sat with his back to a tree , and waited for the first light of dawn.

Of course , as soon as he could see well enough he was able to climb stiffly up a small knoll , and there was the village spread out before him.

Cursing philosophically , he strode down the road and waited for the first signs of life to appear.

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welcome,stranger!
Written by Bagheera (679 comments posted) 1st August 2006
Patterjack, this is a super place to float ideas such as a new character in the community! 
I've been very remiss about not following up a character I introduced a while back as a "mysterious stranger" demanding to know the whereabouts of "le sergeant Bagheera" ..... I promise, I'll do something about it a.s.a.p. :p :grin
thank you!!!
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 16th August 2006
thank you for reviving interest in the village patterjack! 
I love the new character and having a newcomer to the village gives the reader more opportunities to discover the village life and the people who live there in a more indepth way. I particulary liked the fact you gave such a detailed account of peter jacks appearance. I think we should have one of these for every character to develop them a bit more and make them more '3D'! any one in agreeance? 
 
I think the canadian friend may be an interesting character to reintroduce later on.  
 
Especially liked the last 2 paragraphs of this entry! 
 
this has given me several fresh ideas.  
 
brook :)

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