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By Cameron
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30 April 2005 |
Ah the joy of ex girlfriends. :P I wish I was dead inside,
It would end this pain,
Filled with anger and hatred,
Like an emotional stain, Tearing me up,
Breaking me down,
Pushing myself beneath the waves,
And I hope to drown, Every rose has its thorn,
Because of you I am torn, Know this now,
This message I send,
I dont want comfort,
I just want to end, |
The Ex
Written by Ostara (61 comments posted) 1st May 2005 | I am sure millions out there share these sentiments Cameron - we have all been there!
I think this poem converys your emotions quite clearly - it is a poem with a purpose and we get the message loud and clear. The last two stanzas are beautiful, very poignent. The simplicity of these words makes much more of an impact than the slightly over-descriptive first two stanzas. It kind of feels like two halves rather than one whole poem. I am not sure if I am making myself very clear here either, but what I am trying to say is I like the poem's simplicity, it's rawness, but feel it needs a little editing, that's all. I think I need a cuppa! |
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