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Finding his way
By patterjack
03 August 2006
This and prevous pieces are designed to allow other Village characters to assess , gossip about the tourist , and so on.

Above all . I don't want to confuse issues, but I think it might be possible for Peter to run in a story line quite apart from the present saga .

If there is to be interaction I will try to abide by the canon established , or message their creators about meeting characters but this is ,I hope , to be essentially Peter's story.

I hope nobody will object , but if they do , I shall withdraw Peter from the Village immediately.


Finding His Way .

-- Do you have any spares ? Peter asked , as the float drew to a stop before him.

-- I can let you have a pint of gold top , came the reply in a thick Yorkshire accent .

-- How much ?

-- Forty p.

Peter breathed a sigh of relief. That just about took out all his spare change , but he knew that he would have had to either use his credit card or cash a traveller's cheque very soon anyway.

Handing over the coins , he pulled the top and took a swig and grinned at the milkman as he raised the bottle in a toast.

-- Better than water , but not as good as beer , he said . What's the beer like in this neck of the woods ?

-- We've got a good local brew . Real ale , not that mass produced rubbish that Fred has been trying to flog to us .

-- Fred ?

-- He's the publican . Hasn't been here long but he's already trying to change the pub too much.

Peter sensed some bitterness. Some local squabbling perhaps ?

-- I suppose he rents rooms , does he ?

-- He does that , but if you take my advice , you'll find a better place to live than in his pub , growled the milkman .

-- Depends on how long I'll stay , replied Peter. I might even stay on here for a while . Bit tired of humping this thing and I wouldn't mind getting a job locally for a while . Many jobs going ?

-- A few up at the sweets factory . And the farmers can always take on a hand at this time of year .

-- Right , thanks , said Peter . I might stay a night or two at the pub while I look for another place and check out what's doing in the jobs market . Thanks a lot for the help , and the milk .

-- Good day to you then , said the milkman , and started up his float again.

Peter walked back over the road . and resumed a seat on the ruck sack , after he had taken out the few biscuits he had left . Munching quietly on them , washing them down with short swigs of milk , he waited for further signs of life to appear.

It shouldn't be long , he thought , before the inhabitants started about their daily business , and he could perhaps wait till the pub opened before he started enquiries about somewhere to stay . Better still , he could get himself a more substantial breakfast at either the Wishing Well Cafe , or the Jumping Bean Coffee Shop . Either of them would be preferable to the KFC that advertised itself blatantly at the end of the street , and would also be likely to provide him with the information he needed about jobs and accommodation.

Meanwhile , it was turning into a very pleasant morning .

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Don't be daft
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 3rd August 2006
Nobody owns the Village patterjack, so by all means chip in as you feel fit.  
 
Nice to see someone else getting involved to be honest, so well done. 
 
Givitsum
It ain't a place like Dondingalong
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 3rd August 2006
Thanks , givitsum , I will try to provide opportunities for others to build something around the newcomer though I don't expect it will have the menace appearing Bagheera's thread -- which looks interesting .  
 
Did you hear that , B.?  
 
patterjack
Just a small point..
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 4th August 2006
By the way patterjack, I do hope the description of his Yorkshire accent as being "thick" was meant to mean 'broad' as opposed to 'dumb'? We are a sensetive breed you know.... 
 
(Also, the milkman's called Ernie) 
 
Cheers 
 
Givitsum
Yup
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 4th August 2006
Answer to both questions is :  
 
thick means broad to you , but to me it could easily refer to some Yorkshiremen I have heard --- unintelligible accents.  
 
I have read a few of the past stories etc , and therefore I know the milkman's name , but Peter did not . As yet he knows no-one 
 
regards 
 
patterjack

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 16th August 2006
Patterjack i think the proposal you made re having a 'peters story section' is an excellent one. I think it would be a good idea for us all to take a few specific characters and concentrate on them, and i think this has been the route we have all naturally been going down as each of us are gravitating towards different characters and plot lines. Although i think me and givitsum might have to haggle and fight over the rivers' clan! or just share them!  
This could also be a very interesting approach to take as most collaborations like this tend to give writers different plot lines to deal with where by doing it this way and taking different characters i think we will actually get to know them better and hopefully get more consistency. It would also give us the opportunity to see events from different points of view. playing the same scenes out but from the stance of different characters would IMO be something to explore. Would love to hear everyone elses view on this? 
 
Back to your post patterjack i particualry liked the excahnge between peter and ernie, i can see them becoming firm friends?  
Also loved the mention of fred, im sure this is a thread givitsum will develop even if no one else chooses to! but the introduction of possible squabbles would definately be a good line to follow.  
 
Brook

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