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Animal Poem
By MikeMorris
04 August 2006
A poem for my grandaughter Grace for her birthday

              Grace’s Animal Poem
Antelopes and elephants and parrots in a tree
Butterflies and jellyfish and starfish in the sea
Caterpillars munching on a juicy cabbage leaf
Dinosaurs all roaring showing great big massive teeth.
Eels all slippy slidy and a great big grizzly bear
Fireflies and ladybirds and beetles with no hair.
Goldfish shiny, trout all spotty, salmon in a lake
Herring, pike and dog and catfish, even baby hake.
Iguanas (that’s a hard one) lying in the sun,
Jackals,they are not my favourites, they don’t have much fun.
Kangaroos who stand up straight, small koala bears
Lions who as kings of  jungles don’t have any cares.
Monkeys, swinging branch to branch and spiders catching flies
Newts and frogs and tadpoles who have such big, big eyes.
Orang utangs, just like monkeys but they are much bigger
Pandas, staring, please don’t laugh, it’s very rude to snigger.
Quail and pheasants running fast so no body can catch them
Reindeer pulling Santa’s sleigh. Where to? Go on, ask ‘em
Stoat and ferrets, weasels too, creeping in a ditch
Tortoises who move so slow they’ll never get a stitch.
Unicorns who in a race are bound to be a winner
Vixens, foxes, out at night, looking for some dinner.
Walruses eat lots of fish, that’s why they grow so fat
Xyphesia,( that just means a swordfish) what do you think of that?
Yaks with hair so very thick it breaks a strong steel comb
Zebras who complete our tale, to bring us safely home.
 

All these creatures, big and small, all made of course by God.
Can you count the number? Is it even or is it odd?
 
  

Reviews
Good one
Written by Josie (2849 comments posted) 6th August 2006
I think the children will love your poem - and so do I! Really funny. I hope your grandaughter will visit my children's website and let her teacher know of it. I thought your poem had a good rhyme and rhythm, something which seems unpopular today.
GR8
Written by snax0 (5 comments posted) 14th August 2006
I loved this, it 'feels' like it was written quickly and with ease. I wish I had such talent! Can it be learned? The talent that is!

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 14th August 2006
Thanks very much snaxo. Yes you are right, I wrote it one night in bed. BUT it is not a poem. It is a reasonably amusing bit of fun written for my grandaughter. I had to look up an animal beginning with "X" in the dictionary! ( sadly Grace preffered the "Dining -a-deux" which really was quick.It just came as an excuse to rhyme "lottle" with "Bottle" 
But very ,many thanks for your kind comments. 
Mike

Written by Robru (272 comments posted) 23rd June 2008
 
I wish I had the talent to write like this in bed. I enjoyed this very much and my grandchildren would love it.

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