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Coming of the Age
By rilLie
04 August 2006
a poetic imagery of the Judgement Day. i know it's a bit morbid and everything.. probably influenced by the four tests i took today.. one of them was Filipino and the story we had to read was about a janitor who killed his boss and got shot by a security guard... optimistic, right?

Raging chaos surrounded me,

and my hand has none to hold,

my loneliness has come upon me,

as I am now weak and old.


As the people rush, a priest proclaims:

"The lord is angry with all the nations,"

his voice, I hear, loud amidst screams,

"We are all guilty, without exemptions."


"He has doomed us and given us over,

to death we all shall pass.

the slain shall be cast out,

flat and dead against the grass.


"The mountains shall run with our blood,

a fiery furnace it shall withstand,

as the heavens above shall be rolled up like a scroll,

So hear, people, and understand."


His words were deep inside me,

the message forever clear,

as the storm rages onward,

as I know my doom is near.

Reviews
very good writing
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 4th August 2006
keep posting, i enjoy the tone of your writing very much
thanks!
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 4th August 2006
thanks! laboh.. 

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 6th August 2006
A lot of hard work has gone into this and it shows.I am sure on Judgemant Day you will be with the sheep not the goats! 
Thanks again. 
Mike

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