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Mayhem and Chaos
By Ostara
01 May 2005
I don't really know what to say about this - it's kind of self-explanatory. I don't think of it as a sad poem, but tell me what you think please?

Mayhem and chaos

Nowhere to be found

It's so very quiet

Without them around

Not in the kitchen

Or under the stairs

Creep past the hall

Catch them unawares

 

 

Under the table

Locked in the shed

I hear them calling

Inside my head

Out in the garden

Enjoying the sun

Trying my patience

And spoiling my fun

 

 

They are my shadow

Purveyors of mischief

Inventing adventures

Beyond all belief

Sweet as cherry pie

Like chalk and cheese

The same only different

Blue eyes, grazed knees

 

 

Mayhem and chaos

Seeking them out

Both trouble and danger

They are whisper and shout

Causing frustration

Out of my sight

Anger that fades

Quicker than light

 

Then they are hiding

Nothing to fear

Motion has stopped

Without them near

Life and its fabric

Now are so vague

Nothing to inspire

Each day's new page

 

Silence and quiet

Is all I have left

Empty house, empty garden

After this theft

The sun has gone in

My shadow is missing

Fair does not live hear

This home has no blessing

 

Mayhem and chaos

Were up to no good

But for the chance

To forgive if I could

Never forget

The happiness that surrounds them

Angels in disguise

Chaos and Mayhem

Reviews
thoughtful!
Written by Bagheera (685 comments posted) 3rd May 2005
At first glance (and until halfway through) I thought you were describing a pair of Siamese cats ..... then I decided it had to be young children .... towards the end it felt more like the emptiness left after the children have grown up and left home. 
Loved the ambiguity - it left food for thought!
it is a saddy but it's a goody
Written by kevinrobson73 (441 comments posted) 3rd May 2005
very nicely put together 
query on the first stanza  
it was quite long 
perhaps could have been broken up 
sadness could have been relieved with some nice upbeat memory woven in but thats just a suggestion 
ambiguity good if that's what you wanted but i sensed "empty nest" early on
spacing
Written by Ostara (61 comments posted) 4th May 2005
Thanks both of your for the nice words :) I am havinga little trouble witht he spacing though - sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't :( Perhaps it's me but I like to blame my tools!! 
 
The idea of putting a happy memory in early on is a good one - I will see if that works for me. 
 
To me, it's not ambiguous at all, but that is because I had quite a strong idea when I wrote it - just after the Soham girls went missing. With hindsight I feel that perhaps the girls have grown up and left home after all; maybe with a redraft the tone will change, I don't know.

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