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School Bully
By oxy
12 August 2006
Horrid Henry Atkins
was the bully of our school
always causing trouble
and acting like a fool
the teachers couldn't handle him
his parents didn't care
he made our lives a misery
it wasn't very fair.

Then one day it happened
Horrid Henry met his mark
the day he tried to bully
Paddy Watson in the park
but Paddy was not having it
he'd taken all he could
and with a punch right on the chin
left Atkins in the mud

All the people in the park
cheered and laughed with joy
to see someone get the better
of our horrid bully boy
So Horrid Henry Atkins
was the bully of our school
but thanks to Paddy Watson
he's now just a stupid fool.

Reviews

Written by MikeMorris (106 comments posted) 12th August 2006
Brilliant! All my grandchildren, 8, loved it. 
You're not Roger McGough using another name are you? :grin  
Many thanks and chuckles. 
Mike
NICE ONE!
Written by Bagheera (685 comments posted) 12th August 2006
I'd suggest omitting "He" as the 1st syllable of v.2, last line, simply to avoid a break in the rhythm. 
But then, I admit I'm not a poet .... well done!
Modern touch
Written by cherry (2 comments posted) 17th August 2006
I loved this poem too (having just reviewed Grandad and enjoyed that). I think you should write more of these and publish them as a collection for children. I agree with Bagheera that omitting 'he' in the last line of the 2nd verse would keep the rhythm flowing. Well done. 
 
Eileen

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 21st August 2006
simply great. Really enjoyed it.

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