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Renting a Room in The Village
By patterjack
14 August 2006
Settling down for a longish stay

Room for Rent.

The garden was well kept , but with some flower beds bare and ready for replanting .

Jenny pushed the door open , and called inside :

-- Dad , are you there ?

There was no apparent reply , so she looked nervously around at Peter and asked :

-- Would you mind waiting a minute while I just check to see if Dad is at home? He's sometimes out in the back , writing , and doesn't hear anyone .

Peter signalled his assent , though he was a little puzzled as to the reference to writing , and while he waited he studied the rather grotesque garden gnome that lay tipped on its side , apparently waiting to be replaced .

He was about to walk over to look at it more closely when Jenny reappeared and called him.

He stepped in through the open door and at Jenny's direction , deposited his rucksack in the hall .

-- Come on through and meet Dad before I show you the room , she said . He's been working out the back in the garden shed .

So Peter followed her through the house and back kitchen to the back door , where a figure with a familiar face stood looking in slight bemusement at a sheet of paper he was holding.

-- Good heavens , exclaimed Peter . We've already met ! You're the milkman .

-- Right , said the man , looking Peter up and down . You were quick to catch up with me . Jenny tells me you were wanting to rent a room .

-- Yes, said Peter . If it's as nice as the rest of your place it would be very suitable , I think .

-- I'm Ernie , the man introduced himself . You bought a Gold Top from me earlier . As a matter of fact I was just writing a poem about you .

Noticing Peter's surprise , he added :

-- Oh I write lots of poems about lots of things that go on round here . You being new to the place , you deserve a mention in my Village Odes . Here , let me read the couple of lines that I've got down so far .

-- Oh no , dad , cried Jenny , Mr Jack will want to see the room , not hear you recite.

-- It's quite all right , laughed Peter . I'd like to hear it , I've never had a poem written about me before .

The old man looked quizzically at Peter , cleared his throat and began:

With the cold air of the morning reddening his cheeks ,

The stranger puts his rucksack down and seeks

to purchase refreshment from the clanking crates

that line my float , and courteously awaits

while I take out a Gold Top , worth forty p

and he takes out all his change which he offers me

-- It's a bit rough . I've only just started . I was going to turn it into a story poem , but now that you might be staying I'll wait a while before I add any more .

-- I'll be interested to hear what you write , said Peter , but before the old man could say anything further , Jenny tugged on Peter's sleeve and led him back inside .

-- It's upstairs , said Jenny . It's a bit small . It used to be my room when I was a kid , but now I've moved down here to a bigger room at the back .

Upstairs , Peter examined the room , which was indeed quite small , still painted in nursery colours , and with a kitten dado around the wall.

The bed was also small , but having gained Jenny's permission , Peter tried it for size. He just fitted it for length .

-- Seems pretty good to me , he said . What will you charge ? For bed and breakfast ?

-- You'll have to work that out with Mum , said Jenny . I'd say that you could get breakfast at the cafe every morning .

-- Good idea , said Peter , and feeling the need to settle things quickly , he suggested they go straight back to the cafe , meanwhile leaving his rucksack at the house.

Jenny called out to her father , telling him what they were abut to do , and he absentmindedly acknowledged it , while gazing at his work in hand .

Back at the cafe , they got down to business . Mrs George named the reasonable sum of thirty five pounds a week , including breakfast at the cafe each morning , payable a week in advance. Peter was only too happy with that arrangement , and left the cafe to go to the bank to get the requisite cash .

It looked as if he was going to enjoy his stay in the village .

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PerFeck!!!
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 16th August 2006
Ooops!
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 16th August 2006
pressed the wrong key! 
 
From the moment you mentioned Village odes i was bowled over! So glad you have included some poetry in this section. Another enthralling read to add to the village.  
 
[A quick aside £35 id more than reasonable for a room it's absolute theft where im from! You couldn't get a hotel room for a night down south for that price! And the lowest price for a very small room no extras round these parts is pushing 80 quid! Maybe i should move up north eh?!] 
 
I have really enjoyed reading your posts patterjack hopefully will spurn some more interest has certainly given me more than a few ideas to be getting on with! 
 
all the best 
 
brook :)
Well done
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 16th August 2006
Well if nothing else patterjack, you have managed to bring the rivers woman out from her hiding place upstairs. 
 
You have obviously read all the stuff that has gone before, and a few nice little references reflect that. 
 
Promise I will join in soon. 
 
Givitsum

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