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By brook_rivers
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16 August 2006 |
I do not want your diamonds, I do not want your pearls, I am not interested in what attracted all the other girls
I want to be your equal,
To shine in the dead of night, To be the only person who can capture all your sight. |
THE RIVERS RETURN!
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 16th August 2006 | We were going to send out a search party for you dear!
Have you got vertigo spending all your time hob-nobbing upstairs? What have you done with Mango The Chutney Man? He's gone AWOL!
Welcome back
GIVITSUM | Oates hasn't left the tent...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 16th August 2006 | Hello Brook and welcome back from me too. Thank you for your PM I will send you a reply when I have a moment to digest the contents.
I think there were a lot of people worried about you when you went missing. Some thought you might have gone and done what all true poets go and do and said ' Oh! Goodbye Cruel World! 'with a file of arsenic..
As for the poem itself, um,,, well.. not your finest effort to date. I've seen a lot better from you. Fluctuates somewhere between nice and naff. But as it's you and I am so relieved you've come back safe, I'll make an exception and say it was, to use current reviewers technical literary jargon, 'Smashing! '
Slan! | Great stuff!
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 17th August 2006 | I think i'll teach my daughter this one. Fine writing. As ever!
best regards
Leo | Afterthought..
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 17th August 2006 | Yes. Chris is right. What HAVE you done with MangoTheChutneyMan!?
Slan! | thanks for your comments!
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 17th August 2006 | Thanks its nice to be back again!!
didn't realise i'd be missed in a few weeks!
And gerard as for the poem i have to admit i agree it was a nice little rhyme but not exactly poetry - ah well i tried!
Anyone for a cuppa char over at the village pub?
Brook
| Small but Perfectly Formed
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | Brook this was beautiful and was a real cry for equality in a relationship. Its shortness made it so much more poignant.
The line
To be the only person who can capture all your sight
says it all, no materialistic notions matters...what it comes down to is being cared for and being the only one. When you're in real love trinkets and baubles just don't come into the equation.
Lovely writing Brook, as usual...
Best wishes
mish x |
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | thanks for your comment mishmash!
'trinkets & baubles' - thanks you've just given me another idea!!
Brook |
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