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Poetry
The Dark
By Talisker
18 August 2006
This piece was trawled from the depths of my depressed soul.  Thankfully, life is much better these days!

Oli


Lights off, I trace the floaters in my eye,
like pastel patches on a blood red sky.


Then fading first maroon and then to black,
faint glimmer from a far off window crack.


I syncopate the rhythm of the clock,
make samba dances of its tic and toc.


To keep my nightly terrors fast at bay,
these childish games my adult mind must play.


Can I to darkness ever be inured?
Will light and life and love e’er be restored?


Or suffocating darkness win the day?
If so, the Lord to keep my soul I pray.


Dark night, the very antidote to hope,
bright thoughts allow my trembling heart to cope.


Through dragging night each hours eternity,
like vampire sucks the living force from me.


But light arrives, hastened by my sleep,
from my dark place I crawl, begin to weep


With raising of night’s curtain, birth of dawn,
I realise my demons are not gone.


By Oliver Lodge

Reviews
brilliant!
Written by rilLie (329 comments posted) 20th August 2006
wow.. you really are depressed.. i liked the feel of it.. very dark images come to my mind. my favorite line was "like vampire sucks the living force from me." cool. 
 
keep writing! 
 
-rilLie 
 
0_o

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 21st August 2006
Dark and evocative.  
I wasn't sure i actually liked the last line, i felt it was a bit of an anti-climax, however beautifully written. You offer something a bit different i feel.  
Happy writing!
I have now...
Written by ellipinnock (1795 comments posted) 30th August 2006
Only goes to show originality is somewhat harder than one might think! I love this, some great imagery, especially the first two lines, what a beginning! Lovely. 
 
Elli

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