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Failure
By Talisker
18 August 2006
Another cheery piece...


Each day I skim a thimbleful of expectation,
From a Loch Ness deep well of hope,
Then spill the precious droplets on the sand,
Of my failure.


Each week I see the vine of my redemption,
Desperately gasping for undelivered sustenance,
Then the promising buds of happiness shrivelling,
Never to fruit.


Each month  I scrape the rust from my resolve,
Naively painting over its crumbling bodywork,
Then stand back and admire in mock pride,
The shoddy job.


Each year I dig the meaningless resolutions,
From the cold and dusty attic of my soul,
Displaying the gaudy baubles of my lies,
For all to see.

Reviews

Written by rilLie (329 comments posted) 20th August 2006
still as cheery as the last one! but still with remarkable beauty.. nice poem. 
 
-rilLie
It's the way you tell 'em...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 21st August 2006
Hello Smiler. 
 
Nice to see you've at least managed to retain the glint of a sense of humour. Otherwise try the Samaritans. Seriously though, it's so depressing it's getting amusing. I mean you've either got to laugh or cry, haven't you!? I go for the former. Cheered me up no end on a Monday morning!  
 
Well done!  
 
Slan! 
 
Thanks for the feedback folks...
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 21st August 2006
This one was written in a period about a year ago when everything was going wrong. I'm still quite fond of it, in spite of the sad memories it brings back - my efforts tend to be cathartic - its about getting the sadness out in the open for me... Thanks for the feedback - I'll post a few "brighter" pieces today. 
 
Oli 
 
 

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 21st August 2006
Again, great! Everyone has their own idea of what is enjoyable to read. I personally think that good writing makes you feel, makes you think. Your poetry, from what i have seen so far, does just that. For me anyway. 
Keep up the good work! Well done.

Written by Marybarry (237 comments posted) 11th February 2007
Being a chronic melancholic myself, I enjoyed this poem. 
 
Depression is a terrible thing, but melancholy should be enjoyed. 
 
 
 
;) ;) ;) ;) ;)

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