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Struck by Love
By clockwork
18 August 2006
This one speaks for itself I think.

I had settled for comfort, a life quite without fire.

Going one day to the next and finding little to inspire.

Thought it was too late to find

Someone who’d blow my mind.

 

One day there was a knock - didn’t expect it to be you.

Found myself confused and unsure of quite what to do.

Life could never be the same,

And sure enough, there came -

 

A single moment in time when the world faded away.

There was only you and me and that moment in the day.

Something logic can't explain,

Seconds of joy as well as pain.

 

Surprised to say the least - never felt that way before.

You turned the sunshine on and gave me reason to soar.

Even though life can be scary -

I can never again be ordinary

 

Sometimes I’m tongue-tied and can’t find any words at all,

Others I’m tongue-twisted and what I say is off the wall.

But just know this one thing -

You really make my heart sing.

 

You can walk out of my life but you can’t walk out of my heart;

You’d have to cut it in pieces and carry away a big part.

Because I love you, you see

And you’ve become part of me.


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Love-struck
Written by Josie (2718 comments posted) 20th August 2006
I sincerely hopes it lasts, and when 40 years on you are sharing the same fire, sharing your grandchildren and laughing at the same things - it will be true love. I hope so. I loved your poem with its steady rhythm. It's not just men who can steal your heart. My little Jack Russell has died, and I am devestated because she has gone out of my life, but certainly not out of my heart. I do miss her so.

Written by austheke (35 comments posted) 12th May 2007
i liked the voice. a sweet poem. 
 
but. 
 
the rhyme seems forced after three stanzas. rhyme isn't everything. scratch the rhyme if it screws things up in the poem.  
 
:] 
 
i still liked it.

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