OK I suppose it was inevitable that I was not going to let Givitsum have it all to himself. Here's my response for what it's worth, c'mon girls a bit of solidarity here!
If our judgement in driving is lacking
If our parking is causing you flinches
It’s cos you tried to convince
That one little inch
Is really all of eight inches
And you don’t get mere colds or slight sniffles
Like us poor gals, who you humour
It’s a proper disease
That we have to appease
A headache? sod that a brain tumour!
Your peeing technique we may envy
Standing up straight like a man
But we’d be much more impressed
And far less distressed
If you just could get some in the pan.
Of course at DIY you’re the master
We make tea as you put up the shelves
And while you go see some bloke
To replace the bits that just “broke”
We finish the job for ourselves
You say we are out of condition
And our figures are such a bad sight
But like it or not
We’re all that you’ve got
If you want to get any to-night
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Tit for tat
Written by nascent (106 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
| Excellent BBS! |
Written by clockwork (17 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
| Fantastic !! |
Dispassionate discourse.
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
My compliments to you Mrs. B.
A fine retort. Naturally I don't recognise a word of it myself; but I am sure there will be pleanty of men who will. Or should.
We might all of us pay heed to the wise words of Dean Swift who remarked that the 'deficiencies as twixt man and woman are for one all at top; and for the other all too plainly at bottom...'. I'll leave you to conjecture to which each of equally disparaging slurs referred.
Slan! |
Hi BBS
Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
| Good one. I had to go and read Givetsum's original poem to get the full value of it - but you certainly outdid him. And nice of Nascent to give us women a poetic bit of solidarity. Great fun. I wonder who will be next. |
nonetheless .........
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
 ... I still think that a total inability to park is unquestionably a symptom of "Bird Flu" - something I read on a news site recently .... (ducks to avoid incoming)  |
Written by jsyingling (31 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
| Heh, hilarious flow. The last stanza and the peeing stanza had me giggling. A very nice poem with good rhythm, consistent form, and most notably, an amusing subject. |
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
I was waiting for your retort Mrs B and what an excellent one it was! I think you may have just silenced the 'Big G' [ see how the poor loves have to give themselves such boosts?!]
great wriring
Brook  |
Yes
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
| Very good - and fully supporting women! |
As one surrounded ...
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 18th August 2006 |
... by feminist furies ( oh , they bite so sweetly ! ) patterjack quotes the immortal words of one of the earlier Oz poets , C.J. Dennis , in his The Sentimental Bloke
I dips me lidnull |
In the female spirit....
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 19th August 2006 |
| ...sexist, but completely accurate and comic! (p.s- 4th stanza : men are really not that good at DIY. My boyfriend put up a shelf with polyfiller instead of 'no nails' the other night. Sometimes a woman simply has to do these things for herself!) Good rhyme and rhythm. Loved it. Added a little laughter and sunshine to my day. |
OK
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 20th August 2006 |
BRavo Mrs. B, credit where its due. You showed great inventiveness, conjuring up all these imaginary faults.
I do worry how your hubby will react however, when he comes home to find his dinner's not ready 'cos you've been messing about on his computer all day?
Cheers
Givitsum |
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 20th August 2006 |
sexist.. yeah.. but it's the truth... nice work.
-rilLie |
No jproblem
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 21st August 2006 |
"I do worry how your hubby will react however, when he comes home to find his dinner's not ready 'cos you've been messing about on his computer all day?
Now you see , sweetie, us gals can multi-task so it is easy to write a vitriolic man-hating diabribe while doing the dishes, mending the socks, cooking teh tea,re-pointing the chimney, plastering the walls, setting teh man-traps ....no forget that last one, obviously I don' t do that!
Mrs B
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Great stuff
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 21st August 2006 |
| A quality piece of writing! Very well done. Made me smile. My compliments! Cheers Mrs B |
An old joke versified
Written by patterjack (1196 comments posted) 22nd August 2006 |
But the new father's smug looks soon turned to dismay
when from behind him he heard a newgirl's father say
That spout is well made , with knobs all complete --
But it takes a real tradesman to make slots that are neat . |
Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 7th December 2007 |
| Just found this one Jane - in the good ol' Blue Box - very funny! reminds me of Lynn Truss who once wrote something along the lines of "being a woman alone means you can Get A Man In when the washing machine goes wrong, instead of fuming silently while the Man of the House takes it to bits and it still doesn't work." |
Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 7th December 2007 |
What coincidence. I just wanted to write on the subject of manliness, for I read a silly article in the newspaper about it: Some group wanted men to become real men again, as apparently they became sissies in reaction to feminism. At first I chuckled, for yes, some men are indeed sissies. But then they came with this ridiculous remark: "In school boys are told to behave and to be tidy and nice. They have to act like girls".
Now excuse me! So being a decent person is now labeled feminine??? In my view behaving like a pig doesn't make one more manly, but only more, well, pigly... No wonder Dutch women nowadays complain about Dutch men being boorish, if bad behavior is seen as manly.
But OK, this is mainly a response to a newspaper article none of you have read, rather than your poem. sorry, just had to rant...
As for your poem: I liked it. It's not sexist, for it's mostly true and relatively mild. Not brilliant in terms of craft(wo)manship, but a fun read. |
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